lol...
I see someone has hatred towards someone... lol. Needs Sound FX for buttons and such. Good job on the templates, but maybe give in a couple of more seconds so we can comprehend each image. It went by too quickly. 5/10
lol...
I see someone has hatred towards someone... lol. Needs Sound FX for buttons and such. Good job on the templates, but maybe give in a couple of more seconds so we can comprehend each image. It went by too quickly. 5/10
Thank you for some actual respanse that can be used to improve the movie (unlike everyone else). I tried to make it so people could read everything by putting a pause and a play button but i dont know if everyone used that.
too short
too short, it was getting really good. Why did the papa tortoise have to die? If you made the animation at least 2 minutes it would be a 20/10. You get a 10/10 because that's what you're getting lol.
Papa's alive, was too tired to animate any more by that point so ending was kinda rushed, not much movement... running time is 2:40 though!
lol
That's pretty good. The music was a tad too loud, but I liked how the scientist hopped to it. GJ 9/10
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Holy shit!
Put a replay button and a play button on, otherwise, this is crackin. Voice overs are pretty funny cause it's not like the movie-Snakes On A Plane. God, this made me laugh. I didn't see that ending coming at all! GJ
Is this your first animation?
Nope its my 50th animation but close!
Not to shabby...
I'm willing to give you an 8 if you keep up the Bandooker Boys part and the near end. The rest of it is crappy. It's as if you made it crappy at the beginning, and then at the end you made it awesome. This is a good thing, but you want to make sure you get your audience (me and others) interested in the beginning of your flash-even if it is just a trailer. Good music picks. What is the last song? Make sure to give credit either on NewGrounds (the application when you add your SWF.File) or integrate it into your movie at the ending like this: Produced by, Music by, Drawn by, etc.
GJ Try to balance your professionalism-it looks good!
thanks for the constructive review ill be sure to keep ur opinion in mind in my future animations :).. and the last song is from the dark knight i dont remember which one i took..
Ok, here's what the Advice man has to say-
I know a lot about reading fonts. See the font I am using to type this? It is a type of Helvetica. Do not use that font you used in your project because it is a decorative font. Decorative is HARD TO READ. Also, use proper grammar in your text. Instead of saying "it is the 22. of November 1963," say this, "It is November 22nd, 1963." The computer will read either 22nd or Twenty-Second the same.
I think you haven't given respect to JFK. Therefore saying, you specifically told the audience, "His brain tissue flew out." This is disrespectful... don't do it, especially for school.
What do I think? It's boring, it has no music, it needs an intro menu and replay menu, the graphics such as the ambulance and R.I.P. are floating in mid-air which is poor art, and the text is hard to read.
GJ-3/10-10/10=RESPECT FOR JFK
This is my very first animation so cut me some slack and the thing about the brain tissue... read it on wikipedia and alle the other sites.... it says that a nearby guard got some brain tissue on him so i'm just presenting some facts.
blam this.
Vulgar language, and makes no goddamn sense. Use a plot!!!
It takes much less effort to not write a script.
A great beginning...
This is a great beginning to get you started. The idea of the hand drawing the character isn't original, but it is one of the best ideas to use to create a drawing and summon it to life. Your flash needs a story, to start, give your character some traits, make a bigger setting, and create a plot. Add another character somewhere in your plot, and away you go. The happy music makes me think this could be a non-violent story.
Go to it! 4/10
Thanks! in the next view tristan shorts, i will be adding a plot. violent + rabbits is no combi bytheway. also, he exists and lives here right in my house with his brother arthur. Arthur will also get a small role in my next tristan movie.
it's called: Arthur and Tristan in: The alien incident.
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