Lord1Mauler's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Sun King]

Dude....

You gotta play the whole song for one thing. Anybody can move clouds and shapes in the water. I thought the guy sitting down was really lame cause he wasn't breathing, and his cigarette smoke isn't moving. I'm not quite sure how your score is 2.6/5, because this is really really LAME. If you want a score with numbers, you're going to have to add a pause button, the sun has to go down eventually, the person sitting down should move like a real person breathes, the smoke should be disappearing in the air-use ALPHA color to do that or just make a squiggle that runs back and forth. Finally, ADD THE SINGING!!!!! Lame Tribute, no GJ for you.

BJ-Bad Job. 0/10

YonK responds:

Maybe you should take a look at your own animations...

[Rush!!]

Not your strong point?

If flash isn't your strong point, and you don't really try at it, you will get bad ratings. If you said, this is my first flash, hope you like it, I might think you are going to do better next time.

3/10-Voice lags behind text, text runs too quickly, voice not Loud enough, poor animations which look to have been done in 2 hrs. (which explains the amount of effort put into it). I'm rating you by the other flashes I've seen, even though you just did this for a buddy. If I made a quick flash for a buddy, I'd share it with him, not the whole world-unless I thought it was "cool."

GJ on your little flick there. You want a ten, fix the mistakes, and put at least 3 days into this, make me want to buy Rush. Instead of saying all of those stores, say, "Your nearest convenience store." Maybe you did it for humor, but the tone in your voice made you sound bland. Speak it faster.

[Hyperboy: Episode 5]

You have fooled me CONGRATS.

You have fooled me into believing that this is the top quality of flash. I felt like I was watching cartoon network. I'm adding this to my fav's, a reminder of what a 10/10 looks like.

Overall: The plot makes sense, I haven't watched the previous episodes before, and this looks like a daily cartoon T.V. show-meaning I could get it just by being introduced to your characters. The setting-phenomenal, FX-GREAT, the music fit, and the humor was like a dash of salt. It tasted delicious to my eyes!

One word of advice-make the bad guys attack, especially in the hallway scene, don't make it look like he automatically wins, that's too easy.

GJ, can't wait to see the next one! 10/10*

[JFK school project]

Ok, here's what the Advice man has to say-

I know a lot about reading fonts. See the font I am using to type this? It is a type of Helvetica. Do not use that font you used in your project because it is a decorative font. Decorative is HARD TO READ. Also, use proper grammar in your text. Instead of saying "it is the 22. of November 1963," say this, "It is November 22nd, 1963." The computer will read either 22nd or Twenty-Second the same.

I think you haven't given respect to JFK. Therefore saying, you specifically told the audience, "His brain tissue flew out." This is disrespectful... don't do it, especially for school.

What do I think? It's boring, it has no music, it needs an intro menu and replay menu, the graphics such as the ambulance and R.I.P. are floating in mid-air which is poor art, and the text is hard to read.
GJ-3/10-10/10=RESPECT FOR JFK

mustang5111 responds:

This is my very first animation so cut me some slack and the thing about the brain tissue... read it on wikipedia and alle the other sites.... it says that a nearby guard got some brain tissue on him so i'm just presenting some facts.

[Just Gus]

Confused much?

Hey, good job with your transitions between characters. You could have made the chickens move back in forth, nothing stands still in real life-but hey, this might be your style. The audio was perfect, I understood what they were saying, but maybe slow down what the chicken on the right was saying about the hair/feather loss. I was confused about the whole plot, it must have had something else? Is it a sequel? Lemme know.

GJ 7/10-10/10=Less confusion, maybe put a transition between episodes like this, "Last time on Just Gus."

h2o0tterART responds:

Thanks Lord1! And audio perfect? Sweet, although I know I can make a few tweaks (like furthering the mic from mouth when recording). And characters standing still is not necessarily my style, just thought it best for 2 days animating. Upcoming animatinos will have much more action, with explosions! Sorry about any confusion (Gus was just saying how the food/water was causing ticks, rashes, etc.). A sequel? Hmmm... If Gus survives, that is... :p)

[Mutant Grandma]

Menu good, plot...huh?, ending... ok.

Ok I was really starting to enjoy your piece of work until the end. It was WAY WAY to short. You probably got done with the grandma in a day, then said screw it I'm done with this and shut it down with the dinophin. I had to watch it twice to get humor out of the dinosaur/dolphin, but it lasted what... half a second?

Advice for the 10/10: Make it at least 1 minute and 30 seconds, and some sort of plot. Maybe make the Grandma attack little boys and girls, or go along with the Hansel & Gretel theme. There was a great transition between the grandma and grandma/mutant in the silhouettes, but right after that, you disappointed me. Beef up your ending/replay menu to match the 'moderness' of your beginning menu. And most importantly: DON'T GIVE UP, because even I think this flash is going somewhere....GJ 5/10

[Ll - Candle's Mega Secret]

blam this.

Vulgar language, and makes no goddamn sense. Use a plot!!!

Isterbandet responds:

It takes much less effort to not write a script.

[Meet: Tristan!]

A great beginning...

This is a great beginning to get you started. The idea of the hand drawing the character isn't original, but it is one of the best ideas to use to create a drawing and summon it to life. Your flash needs a story, to start, give your character some traits, make a bigger setting, and create a plot. Add another character somewhere in your plot, and away you go. The happy music makes me think this could be a non-violent story.

Go to it! 4/10

Pippatchu responds:

Thanks! in the next view tristan shorts, i will be adding a plot. violent + rabbits is no combi bytheway. also, he exists and lives here right in my house with his brother arthur. Arthur will also get a small role in my next tristan movie.
it's called: Arthur and Tristan in: The alien incident.

[War, Snow and Fire]

3/4 of inspiration

I like how this flash is a silent movie, but with music. Interesting characters. I noticed since they are completely black, their characters have something to hide. Good plot, transitions, and inspiration. Your movie kept me watching, this is a good thing.

[Tankmen Infinity]

Okay.

Watch the fucking language you mother fuckers. Fuck is a word in which, when over used, it sounds pathetic. Yea it was good for the first minutes of the fucks, but lower the language, and put real words in there, then I will give it a 10. Other wise, good blood, good plot. Pretty funny. gj